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Sorry I have to say this, but... this isn't good. I know what everyone's thinking, "you do better" and I'll give it to you. I can't do better in MS Paint. But it doesn't mean I can't tell you that this isn't great. First, starting with Bonnie. I know it doesn't make sense to just start at the end, but I will. Bonnie, Foxy, Freddy, and whatshisface are animatronics. They don't have emotions, and they can't say "say good night kid". They're robots programmed to say things. Sure, go ahead, argue with me, they're corrupt animatronics, but the story of the game is that they think that you are an endoskeleton without his costume on, so they try to forcibly stuff you inside of Freddy's suit. So, that doesn't logically make sense, but then there's the art itself. Alright, the pink cat thing, I can understand. It actually looks decent for MS paint. But the backgrounds and the text. The background is basically just a brown wall with a couple darker brown squiggly lines that you filled in with the fill bucket tool. I do that all the time in paint.net, but I'm not saying it's a good thing to do. And also, Bonnie looks... Bonnie... doesn't look like that, I can tell you that much, and I don't know anything about the game. I played like, 3 nights then got bored. Now, I won't judge you for liking FNAF, I personally think the game is old, the scares are old, and the fanbase is pretty stupid. Foxy. Ahem. Foxy. And on top of the, ehem, cheesy, sorry I had to say that, dialogue, there's even worse text. I'm no text expert - but it looks like the default with a color dropper'd... I don't know what I'm spouting off about anymore. You color dropper'd it, then you typed with the default text. And then for the second part, is when the haters who might have seen my argument and tolerated it come in and whine. For the love of god, the second comic. I... I can't word it. I'd best make a list, but that's not easy to read. So I'll tell you. Alright, first off, animatronics don't talk. They're programmed to say things, and stuff you inside a suit. And two, same with the Bonnie problem, it looks too... cutesy. Putting the background aside because, now that I've come to my senses, it's hard to do better to be honest. And then there's... more cheesy (ugh I feel so bad writing this) dialogue, "you'll regret this foxy" and Foxy doesn't protect like that. It doesn't make sense. Hate to break it to you, Foxy is a costume with an endoskeleton inside, with no programming for emotion. Realistically, let's assume you shut the door before Bonnie got in. None of that happened. Bonnie didn't kill you. Which is unlikely, as let's say they are programmed like that, and they'll actually say "say good night kid". Foxy would kill you. Just sayin'. Foxy isn't kawaiidesu Foxman, Foxy is a pirate fox animatronic, programmed to do things. I... I'm sure there are more things to critique, but... I just have to end this essay with my conclusion. This doesn't logically make sense, the artstyle is usable at best, it's cliche, and it left a bad taste in my mouth. I... I'm struggling to submit this, but you asked for critiques and not every critique can be "I loved it! Try doing this next time, though, okay? :3". If you don't like it, tough. But I'm telling you right now, these are my honest opinions.